Would you want me to give it a try??

In a different world of the same name, the Three Kingdoms are not the same. There was one point, many years ago, that the universe split in two, and, from there, a branching multiverse was created. Hundreds of thousands of these different worlds exist, but our focus for this story lies in this world. Allow me to catch you up.

Our split begins with the country Elodus, as it conquered and destroyed the country of Azorah. Though some of her citizens remain, the country of Azorah is no more. For a time, it was all Elodus, until Richard IV massacred the Snow Elf Kingdom. The survivors were forced to flee, and Civil War broke out in Elodus. Alex “Pendragon” Lokada amassed a force to stand up to Richard IV and try to take him down. Unable to control two countries and fight the war, Elodus lost its hold on Azorah and focused on the war, a war that lasted nearly 18 years, until Pendragon was defeated in the capital city.

As Pendragon stormed the castle, it was as though he came face to face with a ghost. He saw a young girl, only 18, with his late wife’s features and his bright red hair. In an instant, he knew this was his daughter, though he didn’t know how. His wife had left him at the onset of this civil war, claiming he put his cause before his family, but he’d had no idea she’d been with child. It was clear though, that the young girl didn’t recognize Pendragon, or have any idea who he was as she fled from him and his attack. When he lost to Richard IV, he told Percival, one of his Knights, to save his daughter, to find out who she was and what had happened. As the revolution crashed and burned, Pendragon’s men that survived fled, beaten and bloody, to fight another day.

Now, things have started to return to normal. Though Elodus has won, they still bear the scars of war. Weakened and depleted, though Richard IV has his sights on getting his lost land back, he has run into a problem.

As the war raged on in Elodus, a lone survivor of the Snow Elf Massacre set out. Syon was only 12 when he watched his friends, family, and life get destroyed by Elodusians. Anger spurred his steps as he sought vengeance, happy to kill all he though to blame, until he encountered Amondel. Amondel’s family had been the royal guard for centuries, and he carried true to that as he guarded the last heir to the throne, Elind. He convinced Syon that they should work together, find the surviving snow elves and rebuild their kingdom. Working in tandem, the two did just that, and after six years of recruitment and then rebellion, the Snow Elves conquered what was Azorah, wresting it from Elodus to make it their own. Now, the Kingdom of Fellethyr stands proud as the one of the Three Kingdoms.

Elsewhere in Hollow… (we haven’t exactly fleshed this out, so we need to discuss what’s going on in Hollow)

Today we are just a month past the war. Elodus is licking its wounds, and Fellethyr is thriving. Richard IV wants his Azorahn land back, but knows he’s currently much to weak to get it back. For now, he’s spending time with his family and figuring out next steps.

Soooo I guess we don’t get to discuss this and debate on it like we did everything else? This doesn’t really follow anything we’d mulled over prior. Bair gets adopted by the Hollow’s, what? And just happens to kill Inora? That severely weakens your villain I think, and makes you question how powerful she was if some random kid was able to sneak up and stab her in the head. I really think we should’ve had some back and forth beforehand, esp since I didn’t get to make any changes about Ryker. He’s pretty much the exact same, nothings happened to make him different.

On another note, that whole hollow blurb is the way longer than everything I wrote for the rest of things. It makes it seem like this is the Hollow thread featuring Elodus and Fellethyr. I left out specifics because I thought those should be in character cs’s as opposed to the intro, hence why you don’t see Amelia’s story, etc. I think it needs to be paired down to fit with the rest of the intro and leave specifics to be noted in CS’s.

Also yeah, without the massacre there’s no point to the revolution. Most of Elodus hates Azorah so why would they start a civil war over its destruction?

(okay what do you suggest?)_

I actually think it would be better is Aliester survived and Zephyra wasn't a deadbeat mom. Keep in mind Zephyra didn't die right away, Aliester did.

I think it would be more interesting to have the Rulers of Hollow still around and Veronica being preppared for Queen, make her a parallel to Eric and his preperations.

As for Bair, I still want him to be a hero in some way. Be some way absolutely responsible for Inora's death because I have no plans of turning Morgan good this time. There will be no Crystal (Sorry)

However if you think the way I did it was unnatural or forced we can work from there and work out ways Ryker can fit in.

Also I don't give two shits about not having Crystal, I kinda hate her so

Audrey isn't a thing anymore though, I thought?

Also I added the edit, so uh, yeah. "of course Bair doesn’t have to be everything Ryker is in the other thread, he could just be the hero and get the girl, the difference here being Ryker leaves, so there’d be another commander in place if it’s not Bair"

It could be that during the training, he realizes this. He doesn't have to know that he hates the military from the tender age of 5, and it could be his only hope of having a steady meal and place to sleep. So as he trains, and breaks a lot of rules, and stuff he realizes he hates it. He kills Inora and finds his out. I think it's a pretty good explanation beyond "Bair hates military structure" and gives him a reason to.

She's bland, created and defined for her relationship to Morgan.

So Bair and Ryker grow up together in the military, Bair struggles, Ryker thrives, both fight Inora but Bair still kills her, Bair is lauded as a hero, Ryker is another dime-a-dozen soldier. You didn't answer my Audrey question though? I thought we were going with Bair and Veronica being together. Audrey isn't much outside of her relationship to Bair since we're cutting the heir of Elodus thing.

So what we're going with is: Aliestar is still king of Hollow, Zephyra is queen, Veronica is the princess. Ryker and Bair grew up together in the military and in the war against Inora, they fought her and Bair killed Inora, launching into stardom as the Hero of Hollow. We can still have Bair train with Grim, but he comes a frequent face at the castle and eventually him and Veronica enter into a courtship. Hollow follows mainly isolationist principles up until the end of the war where they enter into a tense treaty with Elodus. Azorahn refugees have populated Hollow and the ripple effect of that is still being felt. Morgan is still a threat, decent summary??

I'm gonna ask you let me pair it down to a sizable summary to fit in with the rest of the opener, and anything missed can go into CS's, is that okay?

I have a question, when did the Inora stuff happen?? The civil war was 18 years long, so did it occur during and was strictly hollow based? Cause I doubt anyone would be able to contribute while a civil war was going on

So like can I still do the paired down summary tho? I wanna get this posted